Bex
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 |  Subject: I need you comments...  Fri Nov 02, 2012 2:20 pm | |
| As you know I opened up an Rp called 'The Sanctuary', as I am aiming to write a book, so the rp was designed to help me get going and explore the regions of this so I could write a story. I am designing it so I can eventually send it to Alton Towers... Hopefully if its good enough. But for it to be I need my opening to be spot on and capture the reader, and for that I need the readers help. Even though we are a small forum can you get your friends to help out as well, and post what they think? Thanks A link for those that have Deviant Art... http://tigger626.deviantart.com/#/d5jtp6dfor those that don't, and cant access it... - The Sanctuary:
The Sanctuary was a new scare maze that opened at Alton Towers in 2012 to build to the release of their new ride in March 2013, and for Sacrefest it was a great hit. I traveled here with a few of my friends not knowing it would be the last time I would see most of them alive!
Halloween we visited, and we were all raring to explore the grounds. I have been to Alton Towers a few times before, but never on a night like this. I was excited. From queuing to buying are tickets to scanning them to get into the park. Are day was great then we decided to go on the mazes, since we were a large group we split. Some of us went to the Carnival, others to the Terror of the Towers, some went to try the Zombie Scarezone. As for I and a few we went to the new Sanctuary, as there was some entrancing about the spiral almost Cheshire cat grin that I had a great but a chill down my spine feeling about. It was almost hypnotic. I guess that is where we went wrong...
Well everything was fine at first we traveled to the castle, handed in are tickets, and had are hand stamped with this smile. We sat down on some white wooden benches getting a briefing about the maze, in a glass room with a board in the middle with strange posters on it. The staff were even acting odd, but then that was their job. Mobiles off, no camera's or video equipment, behave, do not touch the freaks and they will not touch you! The gate drew my attention, as an entrance to the Century's old gothic manor house, or castle if you want to see it like that. There was a metal gate, and on top was two lights currently only one lit red. Stand up and hands on the person in front... Then light turned to green as the staff nurse took us through some old looking corridors to an old man, as the gate slammed behind concealing us in!
My mind wondered through the room, the metal cages to one side of us topped with barbed wire, the other side the old man pacing beside us looking at each and everyone. A booth behind him, almost like a sign in with a clipboard, as he explained to us the situation of 'The Sanctuary'. Welcoming us as new patients he set us of threw the door...
I look forward to your views. | |
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totoroguru
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| | Subject: Re: I need you comments... Fri Nov 02, 2012 5:11 pm | |
| Sounds awesome i look forward to reading the rest
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Bex
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| | Subject: Re: I need you comments... Fri Nov 02, 2012 7:02 pm | |
| Unfortialy it will only be available to a select few, those that are my Grammer/Spell checkers, and a few that make sure my audience can understand the language I use :') Then if its good it will be sent to Alton Towers  If its published I will send ya a copy signed  haha! May take awhile tho! | |
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| | Subject: Re: I need you comments... Fri Nov 02, 2012 8:34 pm | |
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| | Subject: Re: I need you comments... Sat Nov 03, 2012 1:50 pm | |
| Seems interesting... But what is this Sanctuary thing and Alton Towers? Somewhere you went at Halloween? | |
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Bex
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| | Subject: Re: I need you comments... Sat Nov 03, 2012 3:18 pm | |
| Yeah Alton Towers is a theme park here in England, and they do a thing called scarefest and they open up these ScareMazes for it:
Carnival of Screams
Zombie Apocalypse Walkthrough
The Sanctuary.
Its some what changes every year though, so the Sanctuary last year was the Boiler House. They are quite awesome (: | |
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| | Subject: Re: I need you comments... Sat Nov 03, 2012 4:16 pm | |
| I see, that's something cool. Well, good luck with that!  | |
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